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~*Left Behind*~

Take me with you

Please don't leave me here

I'll hide away

In the back I promise to stay

Silent and smiling

But deep inside I'm crying

Once again you've left me behind

Maybe someone should do to you in kind

Forgoten again

I don't know where to begin

All I have is a silent night

This was never right

You've left me behind

Now I do to you in kind

Silent nights are now your friend

This wound will never mend

Load the gun and pull the trigger

Your new friend is the grave digger

You left me behind

And now...I do to you in kind...


[sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC]

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I like it. It has a sad and angsty feel to it and I can relate to it in some ways. I can feel the emotion flowing off of every line. This person left you behind...now you're going to leave him behind.

I like this part of it alot.

"I'll hide away

In the back I promise to stay

Silent and smiling

But deep inside I'm crying

Once again you've left me behind

Maybe someone should to to you in kind

Forgoten again"

You most likely don't want to show that you're crying. You have to be strong for you're own sake...


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I see the rain and it doesn't make me sad. My heart is a black hole and no one can save me from it.

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That was definatly what I was going for...I've noticed that I've had a bit of a problem lately getting imagery into my poems. I think it's because I'm expressing my feelings more so than events.


[sIGPIC]What's wrong, cat eat your tounge?[/sIGPIC]

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